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Sleeping Beauty [5/20]
YJ01
beeswaxing
Title: Sleeping Beauty (5/?)
Pairing: YunJae
Rating: PG13 (for now)
Length: Chaptered
Genre: AU, fluff, angst, WAFF
Disclaimer: I don't own anything apart from the story. I wish I had YunJae and if I had my way, they'd move to New Zealand so they can be civil-unionised here

Summary: Jaejoong just wants somewhere to call home again. Living by himself is really not as great as his sisters made it out to be and he yearns to be around people again. He misses the hustle and bustle and even the crying babies that make up his parents’ household but he’s too proud and stubborn to return. He is nineteen after all and fully capable of living his own life away from his ridiculously large family. Enter a tiny little girl who captures Jaejoong’s heart in an instant and he finds himself with a family…of sorts. And for a sheltered, very well-loved boy, complicated doesn’t even begin to describe his life from the moment the tearful baby crawls into his lap looking for comfort.


AN: Wordy Nicki is wordy...



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Goodness I am loving this story! Biases with kids make me go gaga, and this is exactly what this story has. ^______^ Plus, I'm probably not the only girl who feels that way. My friends are that way too about guys.

It doesn't help that Yunho is such a natural father. I'm see that in the way in which he cares for and loves Jiyool with all his heart in this story. Sure he doesn't know what bath products to use and whatnot, but after all he's been through, I wouldn't expect Yunho to be in the right state of mind to pick up on that he's doing that wrong.

I don't think "YunJae + baby has already been done to death," but it has been done an awful lot. Yet I must say that our job as writers is to breathe new life into the same old story ideas seeing as every story there is has already been told (something my writing teachers like to drill in their students heads). I find that is EXACTLY what your doing through the way you're developing your characters and most importantly your writing style. Sure one or two sentences are overly wordy. Overall, however, I think the length of each chapter is great mostly because I love reading long stories. ^___^

Yeah, my husband is a chick magnet in general but give him a kid and he's surrounded. It's ridiculous lmao. And like Yunho's he's a natural with kids too. I generally cannot stand children over the age of five (though i'm fine with mid-late teens) but he's good with kids of every age including teenagers.

Nah he's actually probably like every other guy. I'm pretty damn sure my own husband will think it's ok to use any bath product on a baby lol.

I never had a writing teacher. What country are you from? :O

Lol yeah i'm really wordy. Sometimes I read my sentences out loud and I run out of breath before I reach the end hahaha hence my liberal use of commas :P The next chapter is up and it's even longer than this one... IDEK lol! Thanks for reading and your lovely comment!

oh my gosh, fave scene would be when JJ turns all mama bear on that store lady after what she said to YH....awwww....just like in the story, no one can not like Jaejoong..he's just too loveable=P The Kim family seems so perfect as well..but what would make it complete is if a certain Jung becomes a part of it..*hint-hint*=P update soon!=)

Lol the Kim parents are based on my grandparents. They're really like that. Lovely and non-judgmental and it's hilarious cos one is Japanese and the other is Chinese and I guess they'd normally be pretty judgy? IDK... but they're cool!

Next chapter is up.

oh? So Jaejoong's parent know Yunho?

JaeJoong awesome! I admire his personality!

And you updating so fast! Lol

I'm happy!!!

I'm glad you;re happy :-) And i'm super happy that you like Jaejoong!

Halloo just wanna say yay anotjer awesome chapter kyahh its so sweet just thinking about them in shopping mall hahaha bliss lol and yeah yunho is so yaken aback by joongie's quirks lol awww btw i can attest that your writing style has something special in it hahaha i can just picture them perfectly and imagine situations as if i was there so yeah in short u r good or better yet great haha ^_^ now im so totally hooked with your story i cant wait for the next chapter lol ackk hahaa TC always

Thank you for your lovely comment! I think i'm a bit of a control freak in my writing style though. I make it so descriptive so that everyone has no choice but to see it the way I see it lol! But i'm happy you liked this! The next chapter is up ;-)

jiyool is adorable..love how u include her actions into the story too
all the protectiveness in the air haha
thank u for sharing!fighting!

Jiyool is what brought them together :P She's an integral part to the story hehehe and I like writing her cos I like reading her. Is that weird? And you're welcome!

I just found this fic and am enjoying it immensely, I really cannot wait to read more

I'm really happy you're enjoying it! The next chapter is up ;-)

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I am in love with this story. This chapter is epic especially for the part where Jaejoong went mama bear on the silly woman for Yunho. Jung Yunho would have to be a rock if his heart doesn't melt for Jaejoong for what he did for Yunho today. I believe it has been a long, long time or maybe even never ever T.T has anyone spoke up for him like how Jaejoong did♥♥♥

And I love Jaejoong's parents. I finally understand how Jaejoong turns out to be such a sunshine, mood lifting person. He truly has wonderful parents and great family. I do agree that people that has nice and close family relationship are usually more positive and happy go lucky. Heh, I can't wait to read about Yunho meeting Jaejoong's parents and family cause Jaejoong's mom is definitely going to make Jaejoong invite Yunho over (and I think it'll be soon cause don't think Jaejoong's mom can wait for too long. LMAO, even Jaejoong's father know how scary his family can get. Imagine Yunho meeting all of Jaejoong's sisters and mom at the same time, hahahaha.

Manny? Banny? Tanny sounds like Honey funny bunny to me, LOL. But it's cute how you combined Male+nanny, Boy+nanny and Teenager+nanny, heh.

I love how Jaejong rattles things off without a pause to consider what he has blurted out. Hahaha. He didn't realise that he accidentally inferred that he found Yunho smell edibly good ^.~ Jung Yunho, what say you to this new found knowledge since you've been thinking about Jaejoong and his innocent sleepy kiss the whole morning? It's also interesting how Yunho is slowly a slight possessive stance towards Jaejoong in public.

I love bossy!Jaejoong. Jung Yunho, you finally found your match. This mere boy is definitely not scare of you and I'm really happy to see some of Jaejoong's sunshineness is rubbing on Yunho XDDDDD Jaejong is truly a force of nature, hahahaha and the way he share and feed Yunho the kimbap is so domesticated♥♥♥

What do you mean by you are worried about whether everyone would be sick of “oh another baby fic”??? We will never get sick of Yunjae + baby fic as long as it's wonderfully written and yours is definitely different and wonderfully written.

Edited at 2012-09-05 09:09 am (UTC)

I love keyboard smashes and hearts so that was a brilliant combo! Then I love long comments even more so right now I feel like Christmas came early omg...

Yeah, Yunho is definitely starved and deprived of genuine human kindness. The poor man really has no clue which way is up right now and Jaejoong is spinning him in different directions.

Yeah people underestimate the power of family. My parents were kinda never there but I had a brilliant extended family. My aunts and grandparents loved me unconditionally, and a lot of how I write his parents are kinda based on my grandparents. I'm pretty damn affectionate lol but i'm definitely not as carefree as Jae hehe. I think it's the age and the innocence too with him. I find him such a joy to write, I just want to squish him to bits.

LOL glad you caught that. I lived in fear of someone going "you spelled tranny wrong" or something OTL

Jaejoong is the most honest when he's allowed to ramble because he literally just speaks whatever pops into his head. No filter necessary :P And mmmmmmmm I think Yunho definitely will have noticed his slip of tongue especially after the next chapter. The man is like... IDEK what to do with Yunho right now.

I definitely love a bossy Jae. It's so cute when he pretends to be a drill sergeant :PPP

I cannot thank you enough for your wonderful comment! It definitely brightened my night even though I feel like i'm about to fall flat on my face right now from tiredness. I hope you enjoy(ed) the next chapter too!

Me gusta that you are wordy, hahaha~ <3
I can say that this chapter was all about fluff! Like no ex wife, just a stupid woman who can't keep her mouth shut but~ our Joongie told her what was needed to be told <3
I am so happy that Jung is getting to like JaeJae too much so that he can't really forget about him when he works~ keke~<3
I liked the way the supermarket manager adressed to Jaejoong as "Jung" tsssss <3 sadkasjdklasjld that's my dream =)) to see Jaejoong not as Kim but as Jung Jaejoong <3 in music programs, on wikipedia, everywhere~ <3
I can't ait for Yunho to meet the Kims LOLOLOLOL I bet Jae's sisters are funny lmao.

Thank you for the fluffy chapteeeeer :3

Edited at 2012-09-05 09:41 am (UTC)

I only get wordier as you've probably noticed by now... OTL

Jae is the type of person who really sticks in your mind, like superglue. And as for being addressed as Jung... well then :P

Thank you so much for your comment and i'm really sorry for taking forever to reply!

Hehehe....mother hen..that would be best to describe Jae. Have to agree that Jae is a force to be reckon....but who can be angry for long with that face and personality. I would say Yunho is lucky that his girl picked Jae for him...😊

Lol mother hen, mama bear,, they both work. I really wouldn't want to get between him and anyone who tries to attack someone he loves tbh... And yes, Yunho is lucky indeed :P

Thank you so much for your comment and i'm super sorry for taking so long to reply.

This story literally brightens my day with every chapter. I absolutely adore your style of writing and can't seem to get enough! Thank you for this amazing fic, can't wait for the next update!!

Awww thank you so much. People always comment about my style but i'm not too sure what everyone means because I keep getting different answers lol. But as long as you like it, i'm good.

Thank you for commenting and i'm so sorry for taking forever to reply!

gahhhh! i miss an update!!! *read*

Lol! Hope you enjoyed it :P Don't mind me... i'm just catching up on my comments XD

ahh, even though i'm dying to know more about Yunho's past and his marriage, the interactions between Jae, Yunho and Jiyool are such a pleasant read! it's funny how whenever Yunho thinks that Jae is sorely lacking in self-preservation, Jae automatically shrinks away although Yunho is not really offended. The freqeunt alternating between points of view is a nice writing style and a lot less tedious than say, using chapter breaks to change the person narrating the same long sequence. It feels like a more fitting writing style to the story since it keeps it light-hearted without stripping away the emotional weight of Yunho's situation.

Jaejoong has good sense...most times :P I'm happy you explained what you liked about my writing style lol cos a few people have commented liking it, but most don't tell me what exactly they mean!

Thank you for your comment and i'm sorry for taking forever to reply OTL

My. Feels.

Will Jae's parents use him to get more dirt on Yunho for their newspapers? And, and, I'm getting even more curious as to what happened between Yunho and his wife that made him change. But the only thing that I could think of was that they had a Dom-Sub kind of relationship. asdfasdfasdfsdf. Ala Fifty Shades of Grey. But I'm totally not comparing your fic to that book so please don't be offended! Because in as much as the BDSM was titillating to a point, the writing style was just epic fail. Me and my weird thoughts. But this the plot is getting really good! Update soon! :)

Well... hopefully you've read the rest of the story to know his parents would never do any such thing...

LOL it's almost hilariously painful how often people compare this to Fifty Shades while I really don't see any similarity whatsoever. But thank you, and i'm glad you're liking this so far.

Also, sorry for taking forever to reply :3

I love this chapter too much.I wanted this chapter to never end.
Jae showing his protective side for yunho is very endearing.
Yunho has started to loosen-up.
The kim parents seem very understanding , especially jae's appa.
I just can't wait for the next update.YUNJAE+BABY is a very sweet combo indeed.
UPDATE SOON:D

Be careful what you wish for... This chapter was 6,482 words and chapter 11 that I just posted is 15,427 words omg........

Yunho goes back and forth. I feel like hitting him over the head sometimes...

And yes, to produce someone like Jaejoong, you need parents like his. Hope you've enjoyed the fic so far and i'm sorry for taking forever to reply!